TryOut: Klaus Revada; Klaus Revada [APPROVED]

[Ravilin]

Try-out Role-Player: Klaus Revada
Try-out Character's Name: Klaus Revada
Try-out Character's Race: Shinigami

[Klaus Revada]

The skies pulse beat as vigorous rings of white clouds shifted across its powder blue pallet. The Sun's shine was nothing but a mere eye blinder as it stood before the soul society. This weather was just perfect for a rose. That rose being Klaus Revada. You would see the shinigami walking around in the soul society. Trying to gather up as much sunlight as he can, for his version of "photosynthesis". His luminous white hair glowing in the rays of light that beat upon it. He closes his eyes for just a brief moment as he stops his movements. He takes a deep breath with what appears to be a dull expression on his face.

He looked up at the sky, his eyes still closed as the sun rubbed his skin with its warm hands. he slowly opened his lids as he squinted, just barely revealing his silver irises in the intense ultra-violet rays. The light glinted on his eyes revealing a tiny sparkle as he looked straight ahead.

"The sun; It seems to alive today; So active," He smiled as he placed his hand on his zanpakuto continuing to walk in the direction he already was walking in before he stopped to take in the vitamin D of the suns rays. He looked around the soul society, rarely seeing anyone of interest, or even anyone at all. "Seems to be such a quiet day today," He spoke from his mouth to his zanpakuto continuing to walk. Every footstep made would echo in the silence.

He smiled as he looked further ahead. His smile. Something about it made it somehow brighter than that of the sun. Was he happy? Was he excited? What was he?

[Ravilin]

Gen had been minding his own business, enjoying the clear sky and cool breeze, when some jerk-off Shinigami from the 10th Division had made his presence be known. God how he hated the 10th. Those schmucks were so arrogant and ignorant, bunch of baboons if he ever saw them.

Gen was sitting on a bamboo bench, just outside of the 4th Division grounds, his back against the tall, granite white wall. His arms were raised, shoulder height and were wrapped around two gorgeous female 4th Divisioners. His hand's dangled just above each one's breast. One of the girls was of fair skin and light complexion, her cheeks blush red. Her hair was long and blonde, braided over her right shoulder. It reached all the way down to the dirt ground, just inches from contact. The other was a bit darker, almost with an orange hue. Very tan indeed. She bore short, neck long black hair. It gave her a Gothic persona.

But well, his fun filled-day had spiraled down into the pits of Hell. He lay his head back on the white concrete, his arms still around the two beauties. His eyes were rolled to the right and his expression was sour. This fucking idiot, the Shinigami from 10th, just stood there, in front of Gen, babbling on about how the 4th Division were just a bunch of fucking lazy, no-good dogs. Gen honestly didn't give two shits about this guy, but then, the unspeakable came forth from the baboons gape, "And your stupid, weak-willed Captain."

Gen's expression shifts to display his complete dread. Was this man...truly an idiot? Did he not know who he spoke of? His heart races, almost as if it wanted to jump out through his chest in order to shield his eyes from the tragedies to come. His hands clench, accidentally squeezing one of the female's breasts. He turns towards the victim and laughs sheepishly, but only for a brief moment. Not caring for what the poor girl had to say, Rock turns back to face the soon to be dead man. Well, at least she wasn't around...

And then, Gen notices someone else approach. He turns to face...some weird ass guy who wore a weird ass smile.

[Klaus Revada]

A sudden breeze of wind gently brushed past Klaus as he took a whiff of it. It wasn’t the best pungent, sweet smelling aroma in the world, but at the same time it wasn’t the worst. He closed his eyes, only focusing on one of his six senses for the time being; the sense of smell. He tried his hardest to enjoy the smell as his eyes slowly opened, only to reveal to him a silhouetted figure off into the distance. Klaus at first had no idea what to make of the figure so he peered his eyes to where the focused in on it. It was then when Klaus noticed the rather large man.

How that man portrayed himself wasn’t to Klaus’s liking, so he instantly classified him as an unimportant person. Walking in their general direction, however, Klaus decided he should just see what the man’s reaction would be. If the man reacted as Klaus would had intended, then Klaus would start to have conversation with the person, but if the opposite happened, Klaus would willingly choose to completely shut down the existence of that man by ignoring him to the very core of his heart.

Slowly Klaus began to walk past the man as his sandals scuffed the ground beneath them and echoed. The wind carried their solemn sound in the air and all over as footstep by footstep he got closer and closer. His eyes radiated like white lights as the sun shone deep within them. Everything slowed down as he had begun to walk past the man.

[Ravilin]

Try-out Profile Evaluation Section - Sub-Total: 18/36

• General -Total: 6/12
  
• Thoroughness - 1/4
  
• Organization - 2/4
  
• Cleanliness - 3/4
  
  
• Character - Total: 7/12
  
• Originality and creativity - 4/6
  
• Character depth - 3/6
  
  
• Zanpakuto - Total: 5/12
  
• Originality and creativity - 3/6
  
• Zanpakuto depth - 2/6

Try-out Post Evaluation Section - Sub-Total: 28/64

• Creativity - Total: 7/18
  
• Setting - 2/6
  
• Action scene - 3/6
  
• Character reaction - 2/6
  
  
• Grammar and Sentence Structure - Total: 8/16
  
• Punctuation - 3/5
  
• Sentence structure - 2/5
  
• Readability - 3/6
  
  
• Storytelling Ability - Total: 2/4
  
  
• Flow and Overall Structure - Total: 5/8
  
• Post flow - 2/4
  
• Post organization - 3/4
  
  
• General Detail - Total: 6/18
  
• Setting detail - 2/6
  
• Character action detail - 2/6
  
• Character interaction detail and integrity - 2/6

Total: 46/100

Ranked: Master-
[45P - 54P]

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